The Spring of Elenhiia

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Ebony Flames (Zone BBS Addict) on Tuesday, 31-Mar-2015 19:50:42

I saw the poem by Elenhiia, and decided to write a sorte a response, if you will. Here it is:

The Spring of Elenhiia

Remain Elenhiia
When the sun shines warm
When the buds pop up
When the earth is green.

Elenhiia linger
When the sun sets red,
When the buds wither,
When the earth hardens to stone.

Last Elenhiia
When the sun stays dark
When the ground turns gray
When the sky turns white.

Become Eleniia
When the white mounds tip
When the light comes bright
When you are too cold

Post 2 by Ebony Flames (Zone BBS Addict) on Tuesday, 31-Mar-2015 19:53:43

Yes, I'm aware the rhythm in the last stanza is slightly off, also in the second stanza. I sat there for 15 minutes trying to make it flow, but then when I read it, it sounded allright. So I saved and continued with my day.

Post 3 by Elenhiia (Feather'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr for president!) on Friday, 03-Apr-2015 18:59:56

I don't think I've ever written a technically accurate poem in my life. Heh. I love it.

Post 4 by Elenhiia (Feather'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr for president!) on Friday, 03-Apr-2015 19:02:20

I missed an h in one of my elenhiias. Sorry if that caused any confusion.

Post 5 by Ebony Flames (Zone BBS Addict) on Friday, 03-Apr-2015 19:29:47

Oops. I wondered, but I figured it was purposeful. So I kinda added that part in my poem.